he woka with 8 men salde the 7 seas across the ocean in a shoe. lace after lace the shoe bubbled along in the dead of midnight...as they sailed through the sea 5 men fell overboard the ship cept going .26 years later. A modern boat sailed past the taniwha eria sam felt the leather of a taniwha!it is ok i can seil back won't we sam but sam was not there the water SPLASHED! Jack's heart was pounding like miss trunchbull thundering down the hall but samuel was dragged under by the taniwha. No head gasped for eir he was a goner!
Kia ora Jack,
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Was this writing task for our DASH? paragraphs? I think your ending...he was a goner is great! It definitely adds interest for the reader.
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